anx
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Post by anx on Aug 5, 2005 17:30:46 GMT -5
This was done on blackplanet.com in a PM for a lil lady
Off the dome
Mi reina, you’ve blown my mind in this short time. Simply call you a queen when “niggas” say “yo shorty a dime.” Let me do like that & bet you’d ignore me & find, ways to brush me off. Im looking at ya silky smooth thighs like “damn they must be soft.” But invisibly, you wearin gaurds that say “touch me not.” If looks could kill you’d be murder. I swear when I first saw you, I told myself “forever Id serve her” but ma I admit my instincts told me “I don’t deserve her” You possess a worth while smile runnin warmth through my veins like the Nile. Actin like I ain interested in you is pure denial.
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Cam3leon
middleweight 
skillz
Head Lizard In Charge
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Post by Cam3leon on Aug 6, 2005 11:45:18 GMT -5
Ayo that was slick, man. Good job. 8 outta 10 The highs: Wordplay was good, clever punchlines, sounds like its straight from the heart The lows: None really to speak of. Nice stuff.
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anx
Heavyweight  
rookie
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Post by anx on Aug 6, 2005 13:19:54 GMT -5
preciate the read homie yeah she put me on the spot lol Known her for a while & she knows I write & said 'Yo ass never wrote anything for me'
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Post by Murda Mami on Aug 13, 2005 19:40:48 GMT -5
^ make you own thread
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Post by WildCat on Aug 13, 2005 22:06:27 GMT -5
i was really feelin that i'ma give it an 8.5/10
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