CrYsTaL*eYeZ
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true playa fo sho' an if you in to me you gotz to go
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Post by CrYsTaL*eYeZ on Aug 12, 2005 19:02:35 GMT -5
i close my eyes and try hide
all the problems i see inside
i dont know wut to do i cant get away
im askin god to help me get through one more day
i wish i was that person in my dreams
were ery thing isnt wut it seems
but when the night is ova and the sun shines
im back to reality and leave my dreams behind
i alwayz catch my self thinkin livin is a waste of time
the hate in this world shows
thats why i like it best with my eyes closed
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Cam3leon
middleweight 
skillz
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Post by Cam3leon on Aug 12, 2005 19:05:50 GMT -5
Wow...that was short but deep. 7 outta 10. Keep it up, chica. We need more ppl to rep for MD.
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CrYsTaL*eYeZ
lightweight
true playa fo sho' an if you in to me you gotz to go
Posts: 143
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Post by CrYsTaL*eYeZ on Aug 12, 2005 19:06:41 GMT -5
you in md
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Post by Murda Mami on Aug 12, 2005 19:09:57 GMT -5
yeah I liked it it was tight
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Cam3leon
middleweight
skillz
Head Lizard In Charge
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Post by Cam3leon on Aug 12, 2005 19:51:50 GMT -5
Yeah, I'm from Maryland. Temple Hills, PG County
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CrYsTaL*eYeZ
lightweight
true playa fo sho' an if you in to me you gotz to go
Posts: 143
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Post by CrYsTaL*eYeZ on Aug 12, 2005 19:57:02 GMT -5
baltimore essexs
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CrYsTaL*eYeZ
lightweight
true playa fo sho' an if you in to me you gotz to go
Posts: 143
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Post by CrYsTaL*eYeZ on Aug 14, 2005 18:23:29 GMT -5
ummm put that on your own thread iight^^^
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Post by ASinYztr7Shad0wX on Aug 15, 2005 22:58:29 GMT -5
damn i really like the last line of that poem. "thats why i like to live with my eyes closed". thats deep and insightful and i love it. overall seven out of ten.
high points- deep and original views
low points- lack of a poetic structure. but that aint nothing to worry about
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