CrYsTaL*eYeZ
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true playa fo sho' an if you in to me you gotz to go
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Post by CrYsTaL*eYeZ on Aug 13, 2005 9:35:04 GMT -5
i sit alone staring outside the window think how can ppls hearts be so hollow their so cold and filled with dislike they'd rather do wrong then right i see little children gettin abused fathers walkin out i aint amused leaven the mothers with nuttin but confusion lil boy comes home sees his mom is usin needle in her arm she injected the fuse she lays on the coach now shes seein twos the boy runs up stairs he dont know wut to do he comes back down he starts to frown tears drizzle lightly down his face his heart jus starts to race he didnt want to know but he already knew his mothers life wasnt done it was through layin there with a message that said i love you
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CrYsTaL*eYeZ
lightweight
true playa fo sho' an if you in to me you gotz to go
Posts: 143
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Post by CrYsTaL*eYeZ on Aug 13, 2005 21:23:05 GMT -5
feed back tell me if it was good if it was bad...i mean give me sumthn.
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Post by WildCat on Aug 13, 2005 21:59:57 GMT -5
it was ok...
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Post by 1rapperunknown on Aug 14, 2005 14:36:04 GMT -5
leaven the mothers with nuttin but confused lil boy comes home sees his mom has used
I think these 2 lines should have went leavin the mothers with nuthin but confusion/ lil boy comes home see to his mom is usin/ It just goes with the next line better in my point of view.
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CrYsTaL*eYeZ
lightweight
true playa fo sho' an if you in to me you gotz to go
Posts: 143
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Post by CrYsTaL*eYeZ on Aug 14, 2005 15:06:21 GMT -5
i changed it jus for you
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