CrYsTaL*eYeZ
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true playa fo sho' an if you in to me you gotz to go
Posts: 143
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jus me
Aug 10, 2005 13:09:49 GMT -5
Post by CrYsTaL*eYeZ on Aug 10, 2005 13:09:49 GMT -5
aint herre to discriminate/ especially not to hate/ i'm some one you should learn to appreciate/ i got a lil bit of game/ sum times my words are filt wit anger an pain/ but that dont mean i'ma eva gonna change/ i'ma alwayz stay the same/ i'ma keep it real/ if you got a prob jus tell me how you feel/ cuz i'm done wit all the haters/ an if you one of them talk to me later/ i'ma true player/ an yes a "G"/ if you feelin this then come talk to me/ cuz ill turn that frown upside down/ makin you happy/ peace
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jus me
Aug 10, 2005 14:53:27 GMT -5
Post by Killer P on Aug 10, 2005 14:53:27 GMT -5
good stuff, try to keep your lines the same lenght so they flow better.
keep elevating
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CrYsTaL*eYeZ
lightweight
true playa fo sho' an if you in to me you gotz to go
Posts: 143
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jus me
Aug 10, 2005 15:26:36 GMT -5
Post by CrYsTaL*eYeZ on Aug 10, 2005 15:26:36 GMT -5
growin up in a poor family was kinda hard/ i didnt get nuttin for my b-day not even a card/ three days ago i went to see my fatha in jail/ their askin for fuckin 500 dollars jus for bail/ so now i'm a hustler dealin on the streets/ makin good money but none of if i get to keep/ i gotta pay for the billz and keep food on the table/ thats why one day i hope i can get signed to a lable/ so i can get my fatha out and make him free man/ this is my lyf an i dont care if ya'll dont understand/ i'm jus tryin to make a livin on gods green earth/ i guess this is wut he had planed for me since birth/
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CrYsTaL*eYeZ
lightweight
true playa fo sho' an if you in to me you gotz to go
Posts: 143
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jus me
Aug 11, 2005 9:43:50 GMT -5
Post by CrYsTaL*eYeZ on Aug 11, 2005 9:43:50 GMT -5
i aint in to relationships jus one night stands / i can do anything you want jus give me a man / i no it sounds like ima a slut but u gotz to understand/ i cant be attached to jus one so give me a hand/ men are like sweet chocolate to me/ i need to go through a box to feel happy ;D/ bitches be haten cuz there mans eyes are on me/ i cant help it im sumthing good they see/ 5'9 long legs wit a medium sized waist/ gotta ass that'll put looks on your face / sweet and delicious thats how i taste / still standin strong wit no complaints /[/glow][/color] (i aint really like that ^^jus sumthn that was on my mind )
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CrYsTaL*eYeZ
lightweight
true playa fo sho' an if you in to me you gotz to go
Posts: 143
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jus me
Aug 12, 2005 10:06:52 GMT -5
Post by CrYsTaL*eYeZ on Aug 12, 2005 10:06:52 GMT -5
wut ya'll think i need feedback? ?
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jus me
Aug 12, 2005 10:39:49 GMT -5
Post by phorenzik on Aug 12, 2005 10:39:49 GMT -5
werent really feelin the first but the others were pretty tight
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CrYsTaL*eYeZ
lightweight
true playa fo sho' an if you in to me you gotz to go
Posts: 143
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jus me
Aug 12, 2005 10:51:41 GMT -5
Post by CrYsTaL*eYeZ on Aug 12, 2005 10:51:41 GMT -5
i no the first was jus like a greetin the others were jus for, shits a giggles you no
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